I am younger than insult.
My hard body soaks in salt water.
If you like it, I will bottle it,
a beautiful, gentle tea.
I smell steady. Like a brief cut
across my fingertip fades,
so will this scent. Let me package it.
Let me blush while you reach for
let my heart run a rabbit’s run.
Touch my breath,
intruder! Take me as a stranger,
a boiling black tea.
I gracefully apologize.
This is me.
Direct, to the point, no punches pulled and in the style of Maggie Mae that I have grown to love. Excellent work my friend…not to mention the visualizations.
Wow ! No apology necessary . Beautiful ….
Ms. maggiemae… I’ve somehow missed a bunch of your posts, and seeing this one has reminded me how much I’ve missed your work… Powerful, as always, but with a lighter touch on the irony than I felt before, with no loss of intensity… As I am so often prompted to say when I see/feel (each word alone isn’t enough to describe the overall emotional experience of reading your poetry….) one of your poems… Wow…. 😀
I’ve nominated you for the Sunshine award since I love your blog! Great job, keep up the good work 🙂 http://staceykatheryn.wordpress.com/2013/03/21/sunshine-award/
(Sorry if I posted this comment already and this is a double, this computer is acting funny and won’t tell me if it posted the first time around!)
You took me from the first line. How captivating!
Yes, the first line sucked me in like a thirsty sponge. Very well done as usual.
This is beautiful all the way through. It inspires me to seek out the beauty in others with compassion. Wonderful!
Never apologize VERY good!!! BRAVA
A Beautiful Gentle Tea! Lovely!
What a cracking opening line Maggie!
Congratulations! I have nominated you for an award! Please check out the requirements: http://frankiedman.wordpress.com/2013/03/22/versatile-blogger-award/
This is achingly beautiful. I love the way it speaks volumes to me. Thanks so much for sharing……please continue to write. 🙂
Your bottling and packaging of these senses to share with a significant other is a beautiful and eloquent metaphor that is greatly enjoyable to read. Well done. Again.
I love it when the end of something is like a hammer strike! So final.
My favourite so far. I come back every so often to read this again.
great opening line followed by a boiling black tea
I absolutely love “Intruder”. I’ll take a bottle and a package. Your words are direct, creative, thought provoking and, oh, so memorable.
Thanks for liking my post on “gottafindahome.wordpress.com. I’m following you (sounds like a stalker), so I’ll be back later.
Hey thanks Dennis 🙂 I’m glad to see you back!!