hold on, for dear
life, hold on,
holds on, tight
grip, white knuckles,
ripping my flimsy body
from the sea.
We are ballet together.
Strict, and flexible.
The tragedy of the sea
drips from my fingertips;
he twirls death out of me.
For years, I drifted on dead logs,
raging against a hateful water,
dipping my hands in to remember
the violent debris, floating barely
above surface.
He disagrees.
He only saw a body dance perfectly
ill-tempered, diving into
the boiling veins of the world.
His hands reached in,
not to pull me from death,
not to release me from dangerous
waves that swallowed me in
then spit me back out,
but to dance
a perfect dance
on dry desert land.
wow!!! this poem of yours is so deep and cutting edge.
excellent!
P.S please check out my new blog poem.
Dj Dead Cow -http://charliezero1.wordpress.com/2013/03/26/dj-dead-cow/
π Thank you!!
Stunning! Heartfelt and deeply emotional. Beautiful!
Thanks for reading John!
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Nice rhythm and phrasing!
Thanks for reblogging this piece!!
Turbulent! There are so many dimensions in this verse! Thanks for posting. David Date: Tue, 26 Mar 2013 21:30:02 +0000 To: davidwpeace1967@hotmail.com
Thanks David. I really appreciate you comment!
BraVO! I “feel” your word picture and descriptions of love. I ask your permission…to dedicate them to my far-away fincee`, Inna.
I’d love for you to do that.
I love the image of two people being ballet–together.
π I really dug that too!
I love this.
Hey!! Thanks so much.
Love your poem…
Thank you π
You are welcome!
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I love this.
Wow! I really like this! Reminds me of the comma poem by Xoce Garcia Villa, Once National Artist for Poetry in the Philippines, if not the first. I like how each comma emphasizes the pauses. of course, the line cuts too! thanks for inspiring me to rediscover poetry. π
oh by the way, thanks for liking my poems. idk which one you did, but thanks. I’m a follower, AFTER i read this poem. My fave. π
– Sukoshiyama
P.S.
do you know anything about getting back to writing poetry? I seem to have lost my muse. heh
Yes!! I get in writers blocks all the time, but there was a period in my life that I didn’t write for about a year and a half and it was difficult to find my journey back into it. A writer is never not a writer, unless he is not writing π Just start writing. Your muse is all around you. I explore subjects, read, talk to people. Many people suggest taking a walk at night, sitting under the stars, listening to the silence. I generally find my muse in books!! Hope that helps ~ MM
Wait, before anything else, i’ve got to say wow, nice layout! (it’s been three years since i’ve written poetry and what my lit prof kept telling me was that i should find a better word than nice for expression, but i still couldn’t find a word. hahaha)
as a writer of filipino fiction and essays, Butch Dalisay once said it, a wrtier’s block is a state of fermentation that an idea is not yet ripe for it be used, perhpas we are still lacking in experience, wisdom, and enough vocabulary to cover every word. π (yeah, i dig this blog, i can totally feel your experience brewing with well grounded black coffee)
yep, a poet is only as good as his last one. hahaha, my last one mind you was ‘Profundity’…was it? See, id on;t even remember! hahaha π
Yeah, after I lessened my time training in Karate and Arnis, most of my free time went to that i guess. I found out that I missed having a good conversation about books, a pinch of philosophy, a batter of spiritual foundations (or any spiritual values you follow which keeps you sane in a cut throat work place π π :D), anime, manga, anything that could be discussed about. I missed that part there. Although I’m sure that the physical aspect would have slower progress, i find that it is more balanced, think of it as having fullness, as opposed to focusing on a few things which I would just do, i think I like to keep my whimsy once a week after 5-6 days of schedules. if you know what i mean sister. π π π
hmm…it’s actually conversing with people, about books, or just pretty much writing about anything, aaaaand the whimsy. I am more of a rainbow than a laser. π π π
And i want to thank the poems that i liked in your collection that inspired me, wait, that is so much not the appropriate word…the poems in your collection that reignited, yes that’s THE word, REIGNITED. π Thank you for being one of those people. π π π
let’s all not get too much preoccupied with our work to forget what scientists and children both have, curiosity and the sense of wonderment.
Wow, i can almost have this posted as a response blog and have it linked to your site. I do hope that it reignites more followers, eh?
-Sukoshiyama
P.S.
Seriously, thanks Maggie Mae.
Wow, seriously, Thanks! to you!! you should come over to FB and keep in touch there! I like chatting with other writers, readers, artists, similars, etc π
XOXO
Thanks for the reply ~ MM
I do too.
But, i’d like to put a distinction from my FB. I like keeping a secret name. It gives me excitement. hahaha.
Hmm…i’d think about it though. ANyway, I’d like to keep my records here since it’s a lot easier to find them in wordpress than in facebook. hmm…i’ll see. π π π
haha…i see. No worries. I just don’t do much conversation here usually but, I always do my best to reply!!