Emily, The Tightrope Walker

Emily
walks with rotting feet

turned out
old
birthing hips
rock
with her jellyfish
spine

her path has become
as thin as her
starved bones

a
tight
borderline
between survival and
extinction

Emily
with her nervous order
steps
slight
whispering steps
onto
an aimless rope
an unambitious line

unstable
intimidated
weak
battered
uneasy
shrinking
Emily

walks

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20 thoughts on “Emily, The Tightrope Walker

  1. I’ve got to admit, I loved this poem up to the second to last stanza. The first two thirds of the poem is so beautiful and mysterious and abstract, and then you get to this list of words that are very literal. I’d say that the sense of fear, victimization, and survival come through in the first part of the poem without having to be explicit. Having given my unsolicited two cents, I have to say, I really like it.

    1. Thank you Ben! The constructive criticism is very helpful to me as a writer…that is an impact. I hadn’t thought about the abstract vs. literal vocabulary. Thank you my friend. I will be watching that.

  2. Very well put. It makes me think of a lose relative of mine who is walking a tightrope. I am a bit nervous she will fall off, but more hopeful she will realize she can walk a much wider welcoming road.

  3. The minimal use of language creates this feeling of claustrophobia and within that small atmosphere is an incredible tension that tugs along intensely and with recklessness the heart. Great!

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